The End: Story Two - End of the Line Part 2 By: David K. Montoya


The End:Story Two
End of the Line Part 2
By: David K. Montoya

The Unlucky gave us a disturbing smile. As he got up from the desk I asked him how was it possible that he was able to speak? No other Unlucky that I knew of was able to communicate. The beast walked up to us; it looked like an average Unlucky other than its eyes. They were yellow and orange, but the focus, it was different. There was something there,--cognitive thought, not a blank stare that all of the other Unluckys had.

He explained that his name was Baxter Carter; he was exiled to Corpseland after learning that “the sickness” had contaminated him like so many others before him. Baxter said that he hoped that his transformation into a mindless zombie-like creature would finish soon, because the illness was slowly driving him mad. But that transformation never came. Although his body had changed into an Unlucky, his mind never did. Carter wandered Corpseland alone; there was no one like him. He came to the school some years back and turned it into his home, as well as restoring the electricity throughout the town.

Over time, Baxter learned that he could communicate with the other Unluckys. He was surprised to find out that the beasts had their own language. Words were replaced with hisses and moans. Carter had convinced the community of Unluckys that he was a higher being. From then on they did everything Carter commanded. It was like being the king of a small country; he was the ruler of hell and had started to think of himself as the devil.

Just as he was getting used to his new life and was beginning to forget about his old one, he received a surprise from his past. His son Douglas arrived in the town. Come to find out, like his father, Douglas too had contracted the sickness. His mother drew him a map of how to get to Corpseland, as well as one of the town itself and then sent him on his way to find Carter, which was exactly what he had done.

Douglas recognized Carter right away, and the boy’s father welcomed him with open arms. The two had restored most of the administrative floor before Douglas fell ill. Baxter always believed that his son would become a hybrid creature like himself, but the boy had not. The plague took his life the previous week. Carter went to go wake up his son one morning, but when he arrived the hybrid monster found his child lifeless. Douglas was snuggled up in his sleeping bad and looked like he was fast asleep. He decided that the room his son dies in would become his mausoleum; Carter readied his son for the afterlife and sealed the room to never be opened again.

I then realized that the boy Richard and I found earlier was Carter’s son. Baxter went on to say that after the loss of his son, he himself sealed everyone from the outside world from getting inside Corpseland. Baxter was told by the other Unluckys that we had busted into the town and he knew that I would be coming for the keys after learning about the battle with that monster in the courtyard.

I asked Carter why didn’t he leave Corpseland to go look for a cure or any help for that matter. He explained that it was his destiny to be there in Ely, for reasons Baxter believed were from a higher power.

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About the Author

David K. Montoya has been writing for nearly 15 years and during that time has produced some 200 underground comics, including "M-Team," "Ayotnom," "The Hunters-Xydus," "Lifesigns," "Smash," and continues to work on the upcoming graphic novel, "Underground to Nowhere." Along with producing his current run of poems, short stories and serials, he also did the artwork and dialog for the soon to be released, "Smash, Collector's Edition."
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